I feel like I should make really insightful author's comments, but I don't think I have anything insightful to say!
I took a long time agonising over whether to put internal monologue on these pages or not. I didn't really want to, in fact I don't really like internal monologue at the best of times, only really when psychologically stepping into a character's brain is vital to the story.
But that's personal preference, and I couldn't deliver the information I wanted to without internal monologue happening.
Just noticed I used the word 'really' about six billion times.
I think the internal dialogue is well done here. It's always really hard to decide when and where to put those boxes but I think that how you integrated them came out really nice.
Insightful comments for insightful comments :)
oooh its getting exciting!
I understand what you mean, I'm never too keen on internal dialogue, not because I'm against it, but more just because it tends to not be necessary in any way. As such though, the occasion just arise sometimes, and I think its perfectly fine here :)
And also, I like how your dialogue boxes feel as natural/textured as the images, just lovely!
@Antique Doll- Thank you! As I did more of them, I felt more comfortable with them being there and before long it seemed out of character for Fay not to be having some internal panic attack during this start to the comic! XD
@Theorah- I'm glad you like it! I spent a very long time agonising over the boxes, bubbles and fonts which you'll probably be able to see why once Khern opens his mouth finally. The choices actually have direct impact on the story, as well as hopefully encouraging a personal take on how the characters sound.
@Dasaii - XD Haha, glad to hear it! I've went back and changed them into slightly rounder boxes now though, so they don't conflict with the actual caption boxes that appeared on pages 2-7.